Wednesday, May 29, 2013

Lesson 5 Email Regarding "This I Believe" essays

Dear Class,
 
I have graded all of your "This I Believe" essays and offered you all individual feedback. Please click on "My Grades" and see your score and feedback. As I move on to grade my other class's essays, here is some general feedback to keep in mind:
 
1) The average score for "This I Believe" essays was a 23. I don't share this to make you feel either brilliant, depressed, or "middle of the pack" but to demonstrate that you are not "alone" if you haven't been receiving perfect scores on your essays. I look at your essays in light of the assignment guidelines and the rubrics, and notice "distractions" that get in the way of a savory reading experience. I am so touched by your essays, and strengthened by what you write. Giving you a "23" does not mean I think your essay isn't good enough. It means that there are things in your essay that still need attention, in my opinion. (You can decide that my opinion is a bunch of bologna, of course:)).
2) As you proofread your work, try going through it looking for different "distractions" each time. For example, you can comb your essay once for comma use, then for singular/plural tense shifts, then for past/present tense shifts, then for wordiness. Then you can read it again for transitions, and for smooth wording. So much goes in to making writing great. I want you to feel proud of your polished work.
3) Look for outside help if you feel blind to your own grammar and punctuation errors. You may send your essays to the Writing Center and tell tutors exactly what you want them to look for. We're all blind to our own "motes"--getting outside help is critical. While the Pathway Gatherings are incredibly helpful to many of you, consider getting additional help as well.
4) Finally, after all of that--how are you doing maintaining balance in your life? Is this class taking over your life? If you are spending more than 12 hours on this class each week, consider how to spend less time on the course. What can you do? If you want to spend more time proofreading your work, but you are spending three hours on the comma rules, or several hours in discussion boards, can you rearrange your priorities?
I am here for you, I care for you, and I am praying for your success.
Love,
Sister Bowen

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